Friday, August 12, 2011

Describing a Person by Describing the Place

You might have seen some flashes of light coming from that little hut over there, the old and dilapidated one. You may think that it is just some light bulb problem, nothing to worry. However, if you look closer, you would see 'lightnings' instead of just flashes of light. Yes, you heard me right, lightnings. Small, mini lightnings that erupts ever so often. Though they are small, they still are as strong as the real mighty ones. Well, why listen to an old man tell his old cock-and-bull story? If you believe it or not, I had once been to that dingy little hut a long long time ago...

The place had a strong burning smell, like something had been burning for a long long time. Smoke seem to ooze out of the walls and though it was smoke all over the place, it still felt reasonably cool. The room was dark and eerie as the room had no windows and the door was always shut. Huge machines the size of elephants wheezed and whistled many soft tunes while other small machines the size of mice roared and screeched noisily. To my utmost amazement, the machines seemed to be calling me to go, run away from this place. I took the hint that something interesting was lurking further in the corner and proceed further into the small hut.

Weirder machines started popping up at every corner. One was bright blue and seemed to be floating in midair, just like a lantern without a string. Another was puffing out ring-shaped smoke in every single colour. It too was floating in midair but this one seemed to be magically moving around. Another one was walking around the floor. It walked a few steps and suddenly burst into blue flames. The flames died down as fast as it came and the machine continued walking. A lot more kinds of weird and interesting machines started appearing. They were all very unique in their own ways and were all different. Finally, I reached the final room. A huge machine the size of a mansion stood towering over me. It was round and hollow at the centre, so I was able to see what was on the other side of it. To my amazement, I could see the whole town! Suddenly, a spark formed in the centre and it slowly magnified. Soon, mini lightnings were all over the place! The scene was magnificent but I soon heard footsteps and sped out of the house. It was the first and last time into that small hut.

1 comment:

  1. I like the way you described the place. It is very detailed and you had given the reader a clear view of the place by giving the sense of sight, hearing and smell. It enables the reader to imagine the place as the description is very detailed. You kept me in suspense and made me want to continue to read on to find out more. In the first paragraph, you had an introduction before going on to describing the place. I like the way you wrote the introduction as it is very interesting. In the second and third paragraph, you gave a detailed description of the place, especially the machines. They are very well described and enables me to imagine the place better.

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